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wherearewenow

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Nov 23, 2023
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hey!! i posted a few days ago about two
songs i'm writing and one of them, olive, was a months old demo. i want some thoughts on some lyrics for it!

this is the original demo, with the "old" lyrics: you don't have to listen to the old demo tho lol

new lyrics:

where are we now?
can i find my own way?
tumbling down
i've led myself astray
it's all so loud
but it's all so far away
searching, unfound
could i return home some day?

[there used to be another verse here but i'm cutting it]

hear the seconds ticking by
into minutes, hours
knowing i won't blossom, not a flower
oh and as the days turn into weeks
time flies fast past me
i can't run, i'm weak, where are we?

where have we gone?
things feel different here
past homes were fraught
but now nothing seems clear
who have i been?
who am i destined to be?
when will i know
the ones who've called themselves me?

watch the moments drain away
to eternity
fleeting warmth, decay perpetually
oh, and as the flame begins to wain
flickering in my eye
in the glow is there something to find?
oh, and as the light once bright will fade
leaving darkened sky
i can't see a star, but ill still try

oh, with shadows surrounding
i'm lost, in the words deepest meaning
oh, but still, the melodies ring true
in all the sounds i still can hear you

(instrumental lol)

where will you be?
where am i meant to go?
will we ever see
the stars or the flames gentle glow?
caught in a wind
begging for it to slow
you're someone i've been
but are you someone i know?

is it true?
is all the sky dark blue?
is that something that i've always knew?
or is there something i've not yet seen?
could i ever see an olive green?
all i ask is knowing where we are
even if you answer paths surrounding are still dark
i don't know if you're near or still far?
can't you find it in your heart to tell me?

where are we now?
 
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ChronicPainExistent

One day at a time
Jan 3, 2024
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They're beautiful. Also, your singing is really nice!

(Sorry that that's not criticism; I don't have any.)
 

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